Shyam is a new quality associate. Shyam has been working in the quality team since 2013, and worked as a volunteer in different international non-government organizations such as Lutheran World Federation, and the United Nations. While working as a volunteer, Shyam was responsible for resolving conflicts between two communities to maintain harmony. He advocates on several social issues such as human trafficking, substance abuse, Hiv/Aids, alcoholism, domestic violence, blood donations, and helped ofwith distributing relief materials to the victims of natural calamities.
Shyam has more than five years of experience working in the non-profit organization with diverse sets of people. Last summer, he worked as a peer mentor at
the Slutzker international center as a peer mentor. He helped many international students during their transition to the university. Shyam is a senior at the school of management, and graduating in spring of 2017.

In this first letter, the writer explains the reasons why he wants to take the course. He mentions
that writing 307 is required for him in order to graduate from the program. In addition, he said that he took a presentational class, which will indirectly help in this course and in his professional life in the future. He maintains a positive tone in the letter, which makes this letter interesting to read, and easy to understand. To illustrate, he said that he is “well-disciplined, motivated with a strong desire to learn”. Furthermore, the writer in this letter make clear that his audience is his professor, and he used first person pronoun, which makes the letter effective and sensible. Overall, the letter was very well written.

In the second letter, the writer was saying he is somehow not interested on taking
a writing class, and he has a lot of other problems beside this class like he is taking 19 credits, and schedule conflicts. He said that he is taking this class in order to graduate on time. He first mentions his problem witoh takeing a writing class, and later he mentions he is interested in taking this class, which makes this letter confusing. He stated his personal problems on the letter, and the audience is not really specific, and he clearly lacks a positive tone and interest towards the class.

I think sports as religion is a broad topic; however, sports promotes many features of religion such as player prays before the game, they have a team and support
s each other, and they have a captain like a religious leader in the religion. Since these both religion and sports share same kind of features, it is important to view sports from the religious perspective. In addition to a group of people, these both sports and religion shares characteristics such as faith, hope, dedication of commitment, sacrifice, festival, and finally celebration after the victory in the sports.
My experience
ofwith sports as a religion is whilefrom playing cricket. Cricket consists of eleven players, and does the prayers before the game. All members of the team are dedicated to achieve the same goal keeping the faith to win the game. We have a captain ion the team to lead, and guide if necessary, like a leader in the religion. Sports have an audience and supporters to support and chaieer up during the game, like religious followers. Therefore, we can compare sports as a religion because there are many things in common in both religion and sports.

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